I haven't updated Paper Mario World much lately because I'm looking for ways to make it better. And before you say anything Aegis, "stop working on it" or "become a better dialougist" are not suggestions I'll take. I want to make sure you have the best reading experience possible when reading one of my stories, so I'm open to all positive and/or negative critisisms that aren't the one prevoiusly mentioned.
Paper Mario World Suggestions
- Thread starter Billy12510
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Don't have battles that don't really have much to the storyline.
I've noticed I broke the 4th wall a lot in my first story. Would Paper Mario World be better if I did more 4th Wall breaking?
*ignores Aegis*
Don't break the 4th Wall if it serves to comedic purpose. It's pointless to say,
Mario: Hey, Imma don't want to go there! Surely someone's forcing us to go that way, like in a script.
since that's plain silly.
You need more depth in the story. The mission is too linear, and even with Fawful it still doesn't look like it'd go somewhere. Yet.
Don't break the 4th Wall if it serves to comedic purpose. It's pointless to say,
Mario: Hey, Imma don't want to go there! Surely someone's forcing us to go that way, like in a script.
since that's plain silly.
You need more depth in the story. The mission is too linear, and even with Fawful it still doesn't look like it'd go somewhere. Yet.
If I delete the Story then Aegis wins. I want him to lose.
Or pretend he's not there.
=P
Back to ideas, as I said, linearity is hurting you. There are effectively no twists. Oh, and characterisation is hurt too.
=P
Back to ideas, as I said, linearity is hurting you. There are effectively no twists. Oh, and characterisation is hurt too.
Add more dialouge, all I see is battles and you focus more on battles, but that shouldn't be the focus. Like we should know more about the characters, and not see battling like all the time. 